Friday, April 3, 2009

The Day It Happened - Introduction/Body Paragraph

The summer it happened was a summer I’ll never forget as stepped out the door.......

As I got for the day like I usually did I had a weird feeling like something was wrong but after I lit my joint I felt so much better as I grab my gat and head out the door I forget to kiss my mom goodbye I should of! I always did love her to bad I turned out so bad. . It was just a normal day or so I thought when I stepped out the door I saw that car roll up it all happened so fast but in slow motion as the words slipped oh f***!”

7 comments:

Jose S said...

This is good. punchasen

Anonymous said...

you never even held a heater cuzin don't lie. you did a good job homie
-frosty 801(aka Andy)

Anonymous said...

OH MY GOSH WHAT HAPPENDS NEXT?! Wow I am actually truly wanting to know what happends! Good writting! Can't wait to read it.

-Kesha ;)

joey said...

it was not that bad but you need to work on more detail.

Scott said...

good story but try and make it longer

Scott said...

good story but try and make it longer

villasenor said...

nice introduction and of course great story